Together
This is another one from my box of few scribbles of poetry and was written around the same time as You. Again, I have not changed a single word of it.
Together we were a jungle team
full of play and wild scream.
Together we dreamt to dream,
laugh and cry in gloom and gleam.
Scratch and bite, love and fight ..
all through day and night.
Agreed, we at fault together
then where is my equal right ?
Every night we drink together ..
You, that poison and I, my tears.
How could you turn our heaven into
something, which even hell fears ?
I gaze at space the whole night
while you sleep the day away.
If you wanted to depart,
couldn’t you find a better way ?
With you I learnt the meaning of ‘us’
but you taught me the word ‘away’.
I die hundred deaths every day
For your happiness, I still pray.
Current song- Bahut Pyar Karte Hain Tumko Sanam – S P Bala
Posted by
Cuckoo
Labels:
Human Relations,
Love,
Poetry
40 comments:
Oh!! This is so very sad!!
Sigma,
Oh Sigma !! Sad or happy... Tell me whether you liked it or not.
I didnt like this poetry. I like a smiling Cuckoo!!
I die hundred deaths every day
For your happiness, I still pray.
WOW... that I guess captures the essence of true love..
again a sad but 'true to heart' poetry..
PM,
Comments on poetry please, not on Cuckoo. She anyway keeps smiling. :)
SiD,
Thank you. :)
Wonderful lovely lovely poem.
Conveys so much pain. You are expert in conveying emotions in simplest manner.
Every night we drink together ..
You, that poison and I, my tears.
Loved these lines very much.
Thanks for this lovely poem. Keep writing.
Nice poem, Cuckoo...Sadness and Love are inseparable twins at times, aren't they?
alcoholism? its written well
no comments
love, depression and ?
Why love is not enough
to hold 2 people together -
Why we always seek
3 rd form ????
Pains me a lot to see
love going to such waste....!
- Was easy to relate to this personally as well. However not easy to let go !!
- It seems you are going thru quite a lot...as spectator.Must not be easy.
Tk care of yourself ~
Hi dear, love is that wonderful feelings which makes us so humble, lovale and free from negative feelings..
Anyways...Lovely writting...
Mayank,
Thank you. And you are expert in praising me all the time. :)
Ranjeet,
Thank you.
Sadness and Love are inseparable twins at times, aren't they? Yes, they are.
Aditi,
alcoholism? Not really. Much more than that.
written well Thank you.
PM,
Ok. :)
Maverick,
And ??? Separation, alcoholism and much more. :))
BTR,
Why love is not enough, to hold 2 people together - That’s million dollar question and I don’t think anyone has a perfect answer to that.
Was easy to relate to this personally as well. However not easy to let go !! I am glad my scribbles could spark off something in your mind. And sorry that you have gone through such pains in life. Hope you have come out of it. Please do take care.
It seems you are going thru quite a lot...as spectator. Must not be easy.. Thank you BTR. You are so kind & sweet.
Mona,
Welcome again.
love is that wonderful feelings which makes us so humble, lovable and free from negative feelings.. Yes, it does but it does give us pain too.
Lovely writing... Thank you. Keep coming. :)
amazing stuff...."us"..."away".....
This kind of state of mind or relationship has to be heavenly..
StandbyMind,
I welcome you to my blog.
Thank you for liking & appreciating my scribbles. When new unknown people like you come & comment here.. (good or bad), it really makes me grateful & peps me up to write more and more from my heart.
Thanks for stopping by. Keep coming.
"Every night we drink together ..
You, that poison and I, my tears."-
extremely well put...and really got me thinking..hmmmmmmm !
And thanks a ton for passing by my blog & commenting :)
Pratik,
I welcome you on my blog.
"Every night we drink together ..
You, that poison and I, my tears."- They are my favourite lines as well. Depicts so much. :))
Thanks for your visit. Keep coming.
Nostalgic BUT I like your style :)
I loved the last 2 lines and the pics you posted with poem are superb ;o)
Bahur piyar kartay hain tum ko sanam...ahh one of my fav again :)
Stay Beautiful...!
SugarLips,
Aren't we animals somewhere inside ?? I love to be a wild animal sometimes ;)
And thanks for liking it. :)
well-written dear. but why so sad? :((((
ammu
Nice once Cuckoo.. Very touchy.. Keep Writing
Thats really nice... and way you write makes it quiet interesting to read also... but been the first visit... i must say I need some time to get through your blog and then comment... :-D
I dont want to do injustice to your thoughts... catch u up later... do expect few more comments from me...
Touching poem....i loved it!
Tulip,
Thank you very much. Relax. It is just a poem. Why you became sad ??
Pijush,
First, welcome to my blog.
Thank you for liking & appreciating my ramblings. It encourages me to write more and more from my heart.
Thanks for your visit. Keep coming.
Kuntal,
I welcome you here on my blog. And thank you very much for your so nice encouraging words.
Yes, do take your time out to read my blog. Not many posts. Just a few months old. :)
And I’ll expect a lot more comments from you. :D Let me see when you are starting. :P
Ash,
Thank you very much. :)
very poignant cuckoo, one can never run out of things to say about love and unrequited love..
well done
cheers
k
well a different cuckoo writing it ...eh..nice rhyme by the way..but a tinge sad too..
this is what TRUE affection is all abt.
Keshi.
Karoline,
Welcome to my blog.
Thank you very much. Yes, you are right.
Thanks for visiting here. I hope to see you more often.
Mathew,
well a different cuckoo writing it ... Yes, yes a different Cuckoo. :))) And thanks.
Keshi,
Hmmmm… Yes, you are right. :))
ur blog is beautiful cuckoo. the colours used r very nice and the photographs are also quite cute...
Together is always good for things we do in our lives.
Aditi,
Welcome to my blog.
Thanks for liking it. So, now that you've liked it, I should see you more often here. :)
Thanks for dropping by and keep coming.
Priya,
I welcome you to my blog.
Of course togetherness is always good. :)
Thanks for dropping by and keep coming.
You’ve expressed yourself very well… Did the person to whom it was intended read this? What was the reaction? Great post!
hey shld be birdies fighting...
arre isme leopards kaise aa gaya. ullu hotae to perfect lagta :)
nice poetry.
u shld giv it to some competition.
and wishing u two have great time together
**I die hundred deaths every day
**For your happiness, I still pray.
Excellent!
No other word I can utter at this point of time!
Alpine,
Thank you very much. Well, it is just a poem but yes, based on real facts. I don’t know if the persons concerned have read it or not.
Thank you once again. :)
Jeseem,
Ha Ha… aapko hamesha mere pictures mein interest kyon rehta hai… yahan bhi and on Web Picasa as well :P
Thank you for the appreciation. I write it for myself. I don't think they are good enough to participate in any competition.
Loll.. who two ?? It is just a poetry written insanely. :))
Iceman,
Welcome again after a long time.
Thank you for liking & appreciating my scribbles. It encourages me to write more and more from my heart.
And I look forward to see you more often. :)
I dare say thsi poem took me through a gamut of thoughts!!
from an beautiful relationship turning sour (reminded me of a frnd of mine... she suffered teh same fate!!)... to separation (woteva be the reason!!)
but in the end well written, the pain very evident!!
Sam,
Thank you.
Beautiful poem!
Identified with my emotions.
Do you often write poetry?
Love means being unselfish, sometimes even at the cost of suffering.
My posting of a few hours ago will convey that.
Keep smiling always little bird:)
Indicaspecies,
First, I'll call you only Indica. :)
Thank you. No, I have started expressing in this form only 4 months back.
Thanks for coming over.
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