Wednesday, March 07, 2007

You !!

This is one of my few scribbles and was written around a month back. When I read it now, I think I could have written it more beautifully but I have decided not to change a single word of any of my poems. Let them be the way they are. A little raw, a little immature...

You loved me then, didn’t you ?
You love me now, don’t you ?
Don’t you miss me ?
Won’t you kiss me ?


You found me through a mate
and lost me in love and hate.
I lived bliss in your wordily embrace
You killed me with lasciviously trace.


It is not fair, not just
Don’t weigh me with temporal lust

I am hurt, I am pained
Tell me, what have you gained ?


I shudder, I fright
Of what you told me that night.
Don’t rack both of us
Take, take back your words.



Current song-Kya Toota Hai Andar Andar – Mehndi Hasan

39 comments:

SiD said...

A strange kind of sadness seems to be coming out of your recent posts (though this one has been written some time back)
May be it's my perception..
Coming to the poem... i love these kinds.. simple words..yet conveying deeper meanings!!
good one... in fact touching!

Aditi said...

hang in there.. that is all i got

Ash said...

Nice one cuckoo!

Bendtherulz said...

Hold on there , hang on there- most of the time the darkest hours show the tiny flicker of light which takes you to the new dawn !!

Tk care

Cuckoo said...

SiD,
No, your perception is not wrong. A lot has happened around me in last one month or so. These are all outcomes of those moments.

Poem - This is one of the 7-8 poems I wrote in last one month and yes, I always use very simple words.
Thanks for liking it. If it conveys a deeper meaning to you, think of me..what it conveys to me !!

Aditi,
Thanks.

Ash,
Thanks.

BTR,
Thanks for the encouragement. Yes, 'most of the time'. :))

Merisi's Vienna For Beginners said...

Wishing you all the strength you need and the joy in life you deserve,
Merisi

Cuckoo said...

Merisi,
Welcome again. Merisi, not me but wish the person who's going through all this. Thanks for your wishes.

Sigma said...

Ah!
Wish you strength and wish you that light of the dawn .....
A lot of love and a little pain of the song ...

Cuckoo said...

Sigma,
Heyy you rhymed well !!
I said, a lot has happened around me not necessarily with me. Tell me something on the poem.

Anyways, will convey the wishes to the person concerned.

Leziblogger said...

Cuckoo, lovely, lovely poem!
I didn't find it raw or immature!
Good you didn't change it!

Maverick said...

i knw a lot of guys might hav asked u this, but still, is it personally abt u?

Mayank said...

Excellent! Very emotional poem!! You write so well... one can feel the emotions.
As Sid said, your simple words convey deeper meaning.

It is so touchy that I am compelled to ask.. is it something personal ?

Jeseem said...

seems like u had a tough time

hey get urself together and bring out that smile
the cuckoo is supposed to keep smiling and singing sweet songs :)

Sigma said...

"The pain of the song" was for/from your poem ....
The sadness that the poem is written with, makes it very beautiful .... and more so because it moves whoever reads it too .....

Cuckoo said...

Lazy,
Thank you very much.
Yes I agree. I feel first time whatever comes out is the truest form of emotions and closest to your heart. Words don’t matter to me.

Maverick,
Hmmm.. you always ask this question to everybody. :P
Well, As I said earlier a lot has happened around me but not necessarily with me. Heyy Chill.. it is just a poem, nothing else.

Mayank,
Thank you. I already said thanks to SiD. :)

For your question, please see my reply to Maverick.

Jeseem,
Not me but someone close to me. Ohh don’t worry about Cuckoo. She knows how to smile in toughest situations. :))

Thanks for dropping by.

Sigma,
Thank you very much. It is indeed touchy and being my creation, it is close to my heart as well. :))

SiD said...

hmmm...there are ups and downs... smiles and frowns..
That's what we call life!!

Coincidentally, just saw the movie Life is Beautiful...
Just a few lines from the track of the movie.. hope it will make you feel better..
We'll forget about our sorrows
And think about a brighter day,
Cause life is beautiful that way
There's still another game to play
And life is beautiful that way

Cuckoo said...

SiD,
Ohh SiD many thanks !! Life is indeed beautiful and pretty short. 'Katra-Katra Milti Hai.. Katra-Katra jeene do. Zindagi Hai, Behne do'-- my current song. :))

Thanks for coming again and I mean it.

Anoop G said...

hi cuckoo..,

seems we have written the same answer to the random question

"You have to dig a hole to China. Where do you start?
From China "

Good to have found ur site. Good one.

Cuckoo said...

Anoop,
Welcome to my blog. Thanks for liking it.

On that question in my profile... hmmm.. maybe we think alike or are we twins ?

Keep coming.

Arz000n said...

Awwwwww....so cute wordings :)

Its always betta to keep certain memories unchanged, no matter what. Dont changs this..let it be like the way it was originally posted

Keshi said...

ppl...bonds...expectations...words...pain...memories..scars...

Keshi.

Alok said...

a request !!
can u pls upload the song Kya Toota Hai Andar Andar – Mehndi Hasan

have a nice day !!

Ranjeet said...

Hi Cuckoo,

I went through your blog, liked your writing.

Keep up the good work!

Sugarlips said...

Loved it :) Simple and nice read but a bit pensive though...I hope you are doing fine now :)
Mehdi Hasan rocks!

P.S: Since u liked my flickr album do check out I have posted some new pics :) they might cheer you up :)

Stay Beautiful...!

Cuckoo said...

Arzoon,
No, I have not changed a single word , I will not do it.

Keshi,
Hmmm... True.

Cuckoo said...

Alok,
Done ! Since the song is very big, I had to cut down on quality to upload it. Hope it still sounds good to your ears. :)

Ranjeet,
Welcome to my blog. Thanks for spending time here and liking it.

Thanks for dropping by. Keep doing that.

Sugarlips,
Heyy What happened to me ? I am absolutely fine and chirpy !
Ok, I'll check your pictures.

Jeseem said...

only thanks for dropping bye.
don't u give chocs and candies for visitors :(

Alok said...

oh, :) gayab.

aap nahi samjhengi kitne toofano ke gujra hai yeh dil,
ab jee bas yeh do char pal ki khamoshi he sukun deti hai


but yes, thanks for the song. its beautiful !!
and ofcourse, 50 posts n ur dreams.
keep writing.

Cuckoo said...

Jeseem,
No, I give them tags. Please take up the tag and do the needful. :)

Alok,
Wah Wah !!

Oh Thank you.

SM said...

Hey don't be this sad ever,it happens some times,take it easy.
By the way poem was a good one!

vanity said...

Seems you are a good poet !Keep writing!

Cuckoo said...

Sharda,
It is just a poem. Don't relate it to me.
Thanks for liking it.

Vanity,
First I welcome you to my blog.
Seems you are a good poet !Keep writing!. Oh thank you very much. It was my first attempt in English.

Keep coming.

Iceman said...

Very very well written indeed!

Again... I simply have no words...

Cuckoo said...

Iceman,

Thank you. They are just my scribbles. Never in life I thought I would be writing poems.

Keep watching for them. More will come.

sam said...

ummm.........
der seems to a thin thread of sadness that keeps running through your poems... and dat makes me wonder!!
very beautiful..... keep gng!!

Cuckoo said...

Sam,
Thank you and you wonder too much. :))

Tshhar Mangal said...

ending was a bit abrubt...or maybe i loved to so much just wanted to read on and on..:-)...
nice poem and ya u re right dont chnge any word it...it looks nice
raw and immature...this brings out the emotions in the poem..,in a better way..
keep writng as awesomely u write
God bless u

Cuckoo said...

Tushar,
Oh thank you dear. I am honoured. Comments from people like you encourage me to write more & more. And no. it's not ended abruptly, read it again & go deeper in meaning. :)

Keep coming. GBU too !!

कुमार राघवेन्द्र said...

really very nice...
aapne ise immature kaha hai...lekin isi me iski beauty hai..