Tuesday, September 18, 2007

Passing the Sentence Game #3

Ok, as you would have noticed I am a bit occupied these days so not really getting into a mood of writing a full-fledged post. Also, it’s high time that I have played my favourite game here. So, here I am with the game #3. This time I am making it 25 sentences long but with a difference.

Heyyy, read the rules first before jumping off to the comment section !! They are slightly modified. And this time let us try to make it a story full of Humour.
Let us see how 25 different sentences written by different bloggers across the globe weave a story. As before, I’m going to write the first sentence and I invite you all to contribute the next sentence, in sequence. The sentence is passed onto the next blogger. Just leave your sentence as a comment, and I’ll keep updating this post to show you the flow of the story. Believe me it’s lots & lots of fun !

I want to see how long it takes to complete the task, so please don’t be reticent.

Rules of the game :

1. You can participate only twice in this game with the condition that between your two sentences there should be 5 valid sentences and no anonymous commenter please. I am dead scared of them ! Bhoooot...
2. The story has to finish in stipulated no. of sentences only (25 in this case). So choose your sentence carefully as to go with the flow.
3. If you write more than one sentence, I’ll take only the first one and the story will move from there.
4. Sentences can be as long or short as you wish them to be, use lots of comma & semi colons but the moment you use ‘?’ ‘.’ or ‘!’ your sentence is over. Please refer to Game #2.

So, here goes my first sentence. Let us see who the next one is. Please remember we are trying to make a FUNNY WITTY story.

When a private eye is called to investigate a murder, you know that it’s important, ah very important to keep an eye on that private eye, more so if he has two left feet and the brain of a dodo!

Now folks, the stage is all yours. Loosen the reins of your imagination and create the magic.

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So, the story begins like this.

1. When a private eye is called to investigate a murder, you know that it’s important, ah very important to keep an eye on that private eye, more so if he has two left feet and the brain of a dodo! from Cuckoo.

Peter, looks like you were waiting for me to post something, eh ? :) Here is the next sentence from Peter.
2. The name of this one, Herlock Sholmes, made me even more suspicious about his abilities.

Next sentence is from a new reader of this blog. Welcome abroad Mrs. Mittal !! :P Keep coming.
3. However having heard of his past successes and his 'Karamchand-brain' made me hire him anyways.

Excellent, Maverick !! You are a gem in this game.
4. The huge successes in the past like catching a thief who stole a bunch of shampoo sachets from a locked house and in the hurry dropped his bag with his ID were a proof of his ability.

5. All doubts were gone once it was known that Herlock Sholmes was not coming alone..... he was coming with his master.... "Chemical Ali"... The mastermind who unveiled the "Bermuda Triangle Mystery" and many of "Nostradamus's unexplained prophecies " from Ashish.

Sam introduces another character to the story.
6. And now come around the big climax, when one comes to know that Byomkesh
hanky-panky would also be turning up to do the investigation at the behest of the superintendent of police, Mr. Laugh-at-me-not!!

Seventh sentence came from a very old blogger buddy of mine.. Sameer.
7. Sholmes, I learnt, was a man who now liked to work alone, having successfully solved the Whatson shampoo case, and he addressed me "what, son?" rather too frequently to my liking, and Chemical Ali was a chemically acerbic man, if you know what I mean.

Oh la la !! Aditi misplaced the body !! Is the story going on right track of humour ??
8. The case successfully baffled all the detectives that showed up, as the body suddenly went missing, maybe it too was afraid of its fate at their hands.

As always, Beast tries to drag poor Cuckoo in the plot. Beast, can’t you think beyond Cuckoo ?
9. But the case was not all that complicated anymore, as the detective had found an important piece of evidence; the link to Cuckoo's blog at the scene of the crime, making her the prime suspect in the murder case; but unfortunately no one knew of her true identity; all they had was a pink cartoon linking her to the movie "Hum Tum" which the detectives' will now have to watch to look for clues.

Next sentence came from Mayank, a non-blogger.
10. Ignoring the other two detectives, Herlock Sholmes, eating his favourite fruit banana went into a king sized bathroom... his association with shampoo cases always drives him to bathrooms.. and suddenly there was a wild shriek... I ran towards the bathroom knocking down the other two detectives on the floor... oh the floor was littered with banana peels... damn!

So, 10 sentences are gone and detectives are still biting the floor. Oooops...

11. Sholmes heard the trademark, "Zoinks!!" as he discovered that Shaggy, Scooby and the gang until now had been secretly following him, since the missing body belonged to none other than... the Abominable Snowman!! From Craver.

12. Trrrinnngggg..... the phone rang in the other room, Sholmes picks up the receiver.. he hears a song in a female voice singing... "hum tum ek kamare mein band ho aur body kho jaaayeee "; Sholmes keeps listening till the call drops with a grin on his face as his suspicion towards Cuckoo grows stronger.... but then gulping another banana mumbles who might be the missing body? Vaidya, a non-blogger tries to bring in suspense by making Sholmes listen to a romantic duet on the phone !

Now the challenge for all of us to carry on further.

A request to all of you. Please keep the sentences in flow, read the previous few comments before writing your own, keep them simple to let the next person understand it.

Next sentence comes from Kalyan.
13. Now Byomkesh hanky-panky comes to the rescue, he brings one strong evidence to the people, saying he was indeed asked by a girl for a huge sum of money to help her drag out something wrapped in a jute bag out of the dickey of her car last rainy night and they found out one toy of a cartoon character at the spot, so they know have some evidence against cuckoo, who just have to be found out...

I have all sympathies with dear Cuckoo. :-)

Wow ! Craver has given the story a nice twist. Looks like Sholmes is a girl.
14. Super sleuth Byomkesh mutters "doppelganger" under his breath as he shakes hands with Herlock Sholmes, noticing the tiny, soft hands small shoulders, and (sniff) curiously enough, a feint smell of perfume... and didn't he just see Sholmes a minute ago, headed in the other direction?

Who’s the next speaker ? If you have not read the rules then you are missing something. What ?? Well, you can contribute twice here. :-)

15. Trying to avoid Byomkesh's piercing questioning eyes, Sholmes lowered the cap to cover his(her) eyes, pulled up his(her) loose pantaloons and peeled yet another banana.. gosh how many bananas a day.. and moved again towards his(her) favourite place of investigation.. bathroooooom! Came from Rohit, a non-blogger I guess. Rohit, if you have a blog, please leave your URL here.

16. Sitting on a commode thinking, Herlock Sholmes tried to focus… somehow bathrooms or washrooms are always a perfect place to find a clue and many times he succeeded also and in the bargain charged many gift hampers of bathroom kit as his fees; and thus he became the main source of bathroom supplies for the entire neighbourhood; and so the shops selling bathroom accessories have become his enemies… he doesn’t care as long as he gets his quota of bathroom supplies. From Abhijit. Now I have 4 Abhijit’s coming to my blog. Which one are you ?

Priyank has tried to take the story ahead.
17. 'You shit and stink, I sit and think' was Herlock's motto, and while she scratched her head in the washroom, ByomKESH (who was even more interested in shampoos for obvious reasons) was getting increasingly suspicious about Herlock, after all she was pretending to be a guy, she knew the house well and she was acting too funny to be a detective.... could Cuckoo have killed Herlock, disposed the body under a banana tree and come back pretending to be a detective ?

18. But but but.. who talked about the missing body in first place.. Byomkesh remembered it was a lady on the other end of that mysterious phone call... is it all a goof up or a prank played on all of them.. he looked at the date in calendar and jumped in joy.. yesss it is a prank ! From Dragon.

Now looking at the ‘overwhelming’ response the story received this time, I revert back to 20 sentences. The no. was increased mainly for those readers who had complained about being allowed to participate only once.
So, now only two sentences left. Let us see who those two funny ones are to bring the story to a humerous end. Come on guys, let us wrap it off.

19. It was the Fool's day!...and as an experienced detective, it's nothing new for him, but the 3rd time he became 'fool' on this particular day,1st April, ALSO the 3rd anniversary of his glorious run! from Sag_Nik.

The last sentence came from Pyare Mohan.
20. That is when Byomkesh started jumping up and down in the bath tub splashing water, knowing that he was about to solve the case when he felt the coldness of steel behind his ear and a click...
he froze sweating in fear, his heart stopping to beat....
His heart had stopped beating for sometime, and his body slipped away revealing the cold steel and the object that clicked, was just a new swiveling designer tap which had a trigger to let off the water from the tap...

Sorry, I was not near my computer for last 2-3 days, down with severe conjunctivitis and fever. So, could not see what's happening on this front. I don't think we can call it a perfect end. But I am glad that somehow it ended !! Phew !

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62 comments:

Peter said...

The name of this one, Herlock Sholmes, made me even more suspicious about his abalities.

Peter said...

...please read abilities.

~nm said...

However having heard of his past successes and his 'Karamchand-brain' made me hire him anyways.

Maverick said...

The huge successes in the past like catching a thief who stole a bunch of shampoo sachets from a locked house and in the hurry dropped his bag with his ID; were a proof of his ability.

Ashish Soni said...

All doubts were gone once it was known that Herlock Sholmes was not coming alone.....he was coming with his master...."Chemical Ali"...The mastermind who unveiled the
"Bermuda Triangle Mystery" and many of "Nostradamus's unexplained prophecies "

sam said...

And now come around the big climax, when one come to know that Byomkesh hanky-panky would also be turning up to do the investigation at the behest of the superintendent of police, mr. laugh-at-me-not!!

Sameer said...

Sholmes, I learnt, was a man who now liked to work alone, having successfully solved the Whatson shampoo case, and he addressed me "what,son?" rather too frequently to my liking, and Chemical Ali was a chemically acerbic man, if you know what I mean.

Aditi said...

The case successfully baffled all the detectives that showed up, as the body suddenly went missing, maybe it too was afraid of its fate at their hands.

bEAST said...
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bEAST said...

But the case was not all that complicated anymore, as the detective had found an important piece of evidence; the link to Cuckoo's blog at the scene of the crime, making her the prime suspect in the murder case; but unfortunately no one knew of her true identity; all they had was a pink cartoon linking her to the movie "Hum Tum" which the detective's will now hae to watch to look for clue's.

P.S: God save your soul this time cuckoo :)

bEAST said...

P.S: If I was you, I would start looking for a good criminal lawyer :)

Mayank said...

Ignoring the other two detectives, Herlock Sholmes, eating his favourite fruit banana went into a king sized bathroom... his association with shampoo cases always drives him to bathrooms.. and suddenly there was a wild shriek... I ran towards the bathroom knocking down the other two detectives on the floor... oh the floor was littered with banana peels... damn!

Craver Vii said...

Sholmes heard the trademark, "Zoinks!!" as he discovered that Shaggy, Scooby and the gang until now had been secretly following him, since the missing body belonged to none other than... the Abominable Snowman!!

Praveen G K said...

This is what you call it a mysterious situation; Herlock Sholmes did what was completely unimaginable, doing what nobody in the wildest of dreams could even consider....he quit from the investigation and the cops-o-doodles arrested him suspecting some sort of a foulplay...oh yeah, things are getting clear now in the courtroom war.....aaah! aaah!!!....Herlock is framed by
Shylock, the man who had defended him in the Shampoo bug case!!!!!

Vaidya said...

Trrrinnngggg..... the phone rang in the other room, Sholmes picks up the receiver.. he hears a song in a female voice singing... "hum tum ek kamare mein band ho aur body kho jaaayeee "; Sholmes keeps listening till the call drops with a grin on his face as his suspicion towards Cuckoo grews stronger....but then gulping another bannana mummbles who might be the missing body?

Cuckoo said...

Praveen,
Your sentence has exclamation marks in between. Sorry... I can't take it as one sentence.

So, there goes your contribution as

This is what you call it a mysterious situation; Herlock Sholmes did what was completely unimaginable, doing what nobody in the wildest of dreams could even consider....he quit from the investigation and the cops-o-doodles arrested him suspecting some sort of a foulplay...oh yeah, things are getting clear now in the courtroom war.....aaah! aaah!!!

Cuckoo said...

Vaidya,
Heyy Vaidya,

Read up. Craver has already said body is of Snowman.

Peter said...

I just wanted to say coucou, dear cuckoo. So, more than half way, but still good hopes for a happy end of this story! (I know that you are innocent! How could anyone try to mix you up in this case?)

Praveen G K said...

Oh, Cuckoo, maybe I should have worded it better!!!...The courtroom saga is not for the current case, the case is against Herlock Sholmes for pulling out of the current case.....Confusing, eh? :-)

Cuckoo said...

Peter,
Yeah, poor Cuckoo was about to cry. *sniff sniff* ;)

BTW, you can contribute with your 2nd sentence here as the new rule allow 2 sentences per person.

Cuckoo said...

Praveen,
Hmmm.. yes, confusing. :-)

Can you pls re-word it within the framework of the story ? I'll replace your sentence with the new one. Have a look on other comments.. after you, only one sentence has been added. So, it would be easy for you to remain within that boundary. Also, when you get the 2nd chance, pls try to go with the flow. :-)

Thanks.

Praveen G K said...

cuckoo, you can do one thing, for the time being you can delete my sentence, the succeeding sentence hardly depends on my sentence. I will add the filler later....Till then, Bye

Kalyan said...

Now Byomkesh hanky-panky comes to the rescue, he brings one strong evidence to the court, who says he was indeed asked by a girl for a huge sum of money to help her drag out something wrapped in a jute bag out of the dickey of her car on one rainy night and they found out one toy of a cartoon character at the spot, so they know have some evidence against cuckoo, who just have to be found out...

Cuckoo said...

Kalyan,
There is no courtroom scene now. So, rephrasing your sentence a little.

It'll be now
Now Byomkesh hanky-panky comes to the rescue, he brings one strong evidence to the people, saying he was indeed asked by a girl for a huge sum of money to help her drag out something wrapped in a jute bag out of the dickey of her car last rainy night and they found out one toy of a cartoon character at the spot, so they know have some evidence against cuckoo, who just have to be found out...

Vaidya said...

Cuckoo,
hmmmm yeah hope there is some twist in the truth abt missing body... anyway i am waiting that somebody will create more suspense and funny instances and keep everyone guesses about the body..?
lets see

Cuckoo said...

Vaidya,

:-((((

Looks like people are not interested in this story. No one is really coming up again. I think they haven't read the new rule of participating twice.

BTW, I liked the theft of shampoo sachets very much. :-)

Craver Vii said...

Super sleuth Byomkesh mutters "doppelganger" under his breath as he shakes hands with Herlock Sholmes, noticing the tiny, soft hands small shoulders, and (sniff) curiously enough, a feint smell of perfume... and didn't he just see Sholmes a minute ago, headed in the other direction?

Cuckoo said...

Craver,
Thank you Craver. You are gem of a person !!
You came to the rescue of this story and poor Cuckoo both.
Ahaa, Sholmes a girl ? ;) Nice twist.

Craver Vii said...

Rescue? My dear Cuckoo, your readers seemed intent on including you in the story, so I framed you. I tried to imply in that one sentence that there are now two Herlock Sholmes' running about, and one of them is YOU!! ;-)

Does anyone else agree that comedy is more difficult to collaborate on than mystery? That is not a complaint, though; it is a fun exercise.

bEAST said...

But he knows that he needs to handle the situation cleverly, as there is no telling what arsenal Cuckoo might be packing dressed up as Sholmes; and then it strikes him, "Oh yes, Cuckoo must be the evil sorceress Cuckoola", ofcos that explains her ability to transform into any desirable form, where as the pink cartoon being her true trans-dimensional form, and the blog being her portal into our dimension.

Cuckoo said...

Craver,
Sorry for the slip of tongue there. I meant Cuckoo's blog ! :P

Cuckoo said...

Beast,
I am NOT accepting your sentence. Kindly read the green coloured lines in the post. Please don't make the job of others difficult. I have already received 4 off-line complaints about things getting complicated & the people are baffled how to proceed now.

Please remember it is a team game.

Also, people are unable to see any humour part in your sentence or how it would lead to any. So, please write a simple sentence going with the flow to let others also participate.

Cuckoo said...

To All,
You can take sentence no. 14 as last sentence and proceed further.

Rohit said...

Trying to avoid Byomkesh's piercing questioning eyes, Sholmes lowered the cap to cover his(her) eyes, pulled up his(her) loose pantaloons and peeled yet another banana.. gosh how many bananas a day.. and moved again towards his(her) favourite place of investigation.. bathroooooom!

Anonymous said...

Sitting on a commode thinking, Herlock Sholmes tried to focus… somehow bathrooms or washrooms are always a perfect place to find a clue and many times he succeeded also and in the bargain charged many gift hampers of bathroom kit as his fees; and thus he became the main source of bathroom supplies for the entire neighbourhood; and so the shops selling bathroom accessories have become his enemies… he doesn’t care as long as he gets his quota of bathroom supplies.

Anonymous said...

hey that was me abhijit.

Peter said...

Desperately thinking about a new sentence... Impossible. Completely confused. Good luck to bring this to a (happy?) end, Cuckoo and whoever!!

Priyank said...

17. 'You shit and stink, I sit and think' was Herlock's motto, and while she scratched her head in the washroom, Byomkesh (who was even more interested in shampoos for obvious reasons) was getting increasingly suspicious about Herlock, afterall she was pretending to be a guy, she knew the house well and she was acting too funny to be a detective.... could Cuckoo have killed Herlock, disposed the body under a banana tree and come back pretending to be a detective ?

Cuckoo said...

Priyank,
Nice attempt. :-)

To Non-Hindi readers,
Kesh = Hair

Peter said...

Bravo priyank! The motto is really good! ... and now the story goes on, if course in complete confusion.

Dragon said...

But but but.. who talked about the missing body in first place.. Byomkesh remembered it was a lady on the other end of that mysterious phone call... is it all a goof up or a prank played on all of them.. he looked at the date in calendar and jumped in joy.. yesss it is a prank !

Mona said...

Hi Cuckoo,
I dont wanna use my head here otherwise story will convert from humour to horror..hhehehe

Anyways, will check its ending..

sAg_NiK said...

It was the Fool's day!...and as an experienced detective, it's nothing new for him, but the 3rd time he became 'fool' on this particular day,1st April,ALSO the 3rd anniversary of his glorious run! ;-)

sAg_NiK said...

Hi Cuckoo,
Am lucky to still get a chance :-)).
I first visit PS#3 when already ~10 senteces were published & it was during the IND-ENG T20 ....BUT thnx to our opening pair(136 in 14 ovs!!) & then 666666 (did u watch it???) ....i was completely hooked ,then the SA match !!......yeah......today it's AUS....shud watch this one...who knows,may b we'll upset them as well :-)))))

Pyare Mohan said...

pt. 19. That is when Byomkesh started jumping up and down in the bath tub splashing water, knowing that he was about to solve the case when he felt the coldness of steel behind his ear and a click and a laughter, he had never heard before... he froze sweating in fear, his heart stopping to beat....

pt. 20. His heart had stopped beating for sometime, and his body slipped away revealing the cold steel and the object that clicked, was just a new swivelling designer tap which had a trigger to let off the water from the tap...

Pyare Mohan said...

sorry... change in pt. 19

pt. 19. That is when Byomkesh started jumping up and down in the bath tub splashing water, knowing that he was about to solve the case when he felt the coldness of steel behind his ear and a click...
he froze sweating in fear, his heart stopping to beat....

Peter said...

Cuckoo: Is there any rule against you making the last sentence yourself?

Cuckoo said...

SagNik,
Thanks for everything. Yes, Cricket fever is on and today's final is THE match to watch. :-)

PM,
Really not in a position to see what happened here in last 2-3 days. Merging your both the sentences as taking only one will not suffice. Also, you haven't used any sentence terminator.

But still I can not call it a perfect end. Perhaps you have not read that I made it 20 sentence game.

Cuckoo said...

Peter,
No, there is no such rule. II am down with conjunctivitis and fever, hence the delay.

I am glad that the story somehow came to an end, not a good end though.

I have one post to make for which I have a deadline !! :-)
I'll try to make it today itself.

Keshi said...

hehehehe Cuckoo nice one.

When I read the word 'Kesh' I thought u wrote abt me LOL!

Keshi.

Peter said...

Maybe not the happy end you expected. At least your responsibility and role in the drama is not confirmed!! "Phew" as you say!!

Now, the main thing is that you recover!

adi said...

:(
gaon basa nahi, lutere pehle aa gaye!!!
main ni, mujhe ek aur story chahiye, u shud have told me, atleast a hind wud have done...
pls pls pls
wen r u starting the next story
oh
and pls take care
waiting for u to come back with a cuckdookoo bang :)
love
p.s. make the next one a sci fi.

adi said...

ah!
galti se mistake ho gayi
that word in the third sentence was *hint, not hind
*sheepish*

ashes said...

Shit! I had read your first sentence and then had thought would contribute once the story gets momentum...but then it got totally off my mind, and when I came back, saw that you actually had a tough time getting the story completed...

Cuckoo said...

Keshi,
Thank you.

Peter,
Thanks. I have recovered now.

Cuckoo said...

Adi,
Oh Oh I should have told you about the start of this game. You never told me so. If at all I play this game in future, I will sure tell you.

“wen r u starting the next story.. “ Jee nahi. Ab to main khelungi he nahi. Koi achha response nahi tha is baar. :(

Cuckoo said...

Ashes,
Hmmm… Never mind. I don’t think I am going to play it again in near future. :(

I think the story went off track because of Beast’s first sentence. Also, I sternly had to reject his 2nd sentence.

Praveen brought court scene which was a total mis-match. No body after him referred to the court. So, his contribution was a waste.

Beerspitnight said...

If I could understand Cricket I would have a more intelligent post to leave here. But I'm Amerikan, so mediocrity and ignorance is the way it goes.

alpine path said...

Aha! very interesting game :) Goes to show what a varied group of bloggers can do :)

Cuckoo said...

Beerspitnight,
What a name you have ! Welcome to my nest.
Never mind, I am wondering what made you come to my blog & leaving a comment on this post then.

Thanks for your visit. Keep coming.

Alpine,
Yes, it is interesting but sometimes I get dizzy reading the sentence. Ha Ha....

Next time you gonna participate too to experience the thrill.

adi said...

theek hai, ek innings mein out ho gaye to doosri to khelni hi nahi na! acchi baat hai... *a disappointed shake of head and sigh*... sigh
and i thought, chak de cuckoo!!!

Cuckoo said...

Adi,
Haanji, jab team mein poore players nahi hoN ya fir team kachhi ho to match khelna hee nahi chahiye. :-)